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Friday, March 11, 2016

Kawa of care

Kawa of care. A class presentation. (My one is slide 4)


Jamie_Venn diagram

This is a venn diagram for the book Journey to Tangiwai



BO3

Something my friend and I did (You should know the game ;) )



TITLE: Black ops 3 with Pranav


Planning
1. Starting the game
2.The struggle
3.The end?
4.
5.


Writing
Pranav and I strolled into the lounge for an epic game session of a video game Black Ops 3. I grip Pranavs controller as he sets up the game to zombies with no sound except the tvs. Pressing the button the countdown started. The feeling of shredding the old wrinkled,disease carrying people of the map as round one starts. Starting of with a 9mm bullet firing gun cocking it ready to be fired. The reanimated corpses were already on the run tearing down the barriers. Glaring at Pranav through my iron sights as he bypassed the flesh eaters. Opening the first door as I kissed 500 points goodbye.


Sprinting to the next buy able door as Pranav held of the zombies. “Just a few more secON!” Just before I could finish my sentence a zombie grabbed me with his old rotten hand from behind. Falling to the floor with Pranav on his last mag. On the ground lying, shocked on what happened. Rivulets of my blood slowly drifted to Pranav feet as a few zombies remained. On my final seconds of life with a couple of zombies walking and Pranav in the corner it was time to say goodbye.


With 1 survivor left on the map, Pranav had to finish the round. Spectating him to watch his back. Fending of the last zombies with his knife the round ended to a new but it had a twist. In the background of 7 vicious carnivores was a Margwa. A 4 meter high 3 headed humanoid creature with octopus arms out for us. Slowly backing up from the thing while the zombies were closing in their was no hope. Each second was tormenting as each second was scarce. It was too late. The zombies were 1 meter away from us till the Margwa raised his tentacles then it was all over. The thing squashed us.


Marking
Ideas
Points
Comment
3
Yes it has a lots of simple ideas. It should have more complex ideas

3
You have lots of detail but on a few simple ideas. Try to write about things that are going to give you lots of ideas and things to write about.

Tuesday, March 8, 2016